What's wrong with this headline?
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
The original headline is as per the link... http://www.foxnews.com/entertainment/2013/08/14/gia-allemand-bachelor-hospitalized-in-critical-condition/[^] So it would seem they updated the crucial part (that he/she died) but not removed the "attempt" bit...
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
A missing comma? I.e. ".. at 29, after apparent.."
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'Bachelor' star Gia Allemand dies at 29 after apparent suicide attempt[^] And no, I don't mean considering anything about a sureality TV "star" newsworthy. :rolleyes:
Did you ever see history portrayed as an old man with a wise brow and pulseless heart, waging all things in the balance of reason? Is not rather the genius of history like an eternal, imploring maiden, full of fire, with a burning heart and flaming soul, humanly warm and humanly beautiful? --Zachris Topelius Training a telescope on one’s own belly button will only reveal lint. You like that? You go right on staring at it. I prefer looking at galaxies. -- Sarah Hoyt
"star", "dies", "apparent", "suicide", and "attempt" should be capitalised, and a comma is required after "29". Bluddy amateurs.
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"star", "dies", "apparent", "suicide", and "attempt" should be capitalised, and a comma is required after "29". Bluddy amateurs.
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That she has died: Fact That it was suicide: Not certain, hence apparent That it was the suicide act that eventually led to death: Not certain, hence attempt Perhaps. That would be a very cautious jornalist mind, not often their strong point.
I've worked too much with newspapers to expect them to get their facts right, but I do insist on bollocks being written using correct grammar and style. ... In fact, it's something of a speciality of mine...
I wanna be a eunuchs developer! Pass me a bread knife!
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I've worked too much with newspapers to expect them to get their facts right, but I do insist on bollocks being written using correct grammar and style. ... In fact, it's something of a speciality of mine...
I wanna be a eunuchs developer! Pass me a bread knife!
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I'm afraid I can't write bollocks quite that bollocky. Maybe that's a failing.
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