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  • S soap brain

    That wasn't the plan, but it doesn't matter overly.

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    Dalek Dave
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    Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

    That wasn't the plan, but it doesn't matter overly.

    ? Never end a Sentence with a preposition! Up with this I will not put.

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      Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

      That wasn't the plan, but it doesn't matter overly.

      ? Never end a Sentence with a preposition! Up with this I will not put.

      ------------------------------------ "I'd rather have a bottle in front of me than a frontal lobotomy" - Bob Monkhouse

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      'Overly' is an adverb. ;P

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        I didn't read what you post yet

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        soap brain
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        The Developer wrote:

        I didn't read what to post yet

        What's your native language? :confused:

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          The Developer wrote:

          I didn't read what to post yet

          What's your native language? :confused:

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          :omg:

          Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

          The Developer wrote: I didn't read what to post yet

          from where did you get that. i didn't say that :wtf: :omg:

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            :omg:

            Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

            The Developer wrote: I didn't read what to post yet

            from where did you get that. i didn't say that :wtf: :omg:

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            Does anyone like you?

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              For English. Basically we had to draw a basic plot out of a hat and write a short story based off it. I drew 'running away from home', and I've written some, but I have no idea where I'm going with it. I need some ideas for an ending, and of course the other bits I've left out. General criticism is certainly welcome too, as long as it's critical praise! :-D Anyway, here it is: **** I felt like I’d made the right choice, even though there was no choice. Not really. All I’d done was all I could do. I’d put some warm clothes on, stuffed my black backpack that was only three weeks old. And that was it. I was gone. Slinking through the darkness, caressed by the breath that crystallised in front of me. Only able to see a distance of mere inches, the air was so bad. I was lost, it seemed. Despite the purpose in my walk, despite the assuredness in my face. I was as transparent as glass, a little kid lost and scared. Maybe my eyes gave it away, the way I always looked away. My lips in a silent prayer to whoever would listen. I told them that I didn’t want to die here tonight. And I kept on telling them. I was on my way to see my friend. He was the loneliest kid I had ever seen, save for me. Lonelier, even, because he was strong and I was weak. I needed him, but he didn’t need me. Still, he agreed to come with me tonight. He knew he had to, too. He was going to our secret place, like I was. And after that, we’d get away. Just like we’d always dreamed. I found him, as I knew I would. Waiting for me. And I felt a tremendous rush of gratitude towards him, for being here. Reminding me that I am not alone. I wanted him to see how happy I was to see him, but his eyes were downcast. Like he didn’t even see me. Like he was vaguely someone else. And he muttered, more to himself than anything, that we should get going right away. And we did. We were quiet, because we had to be, at least at the moment. But, the quietude dripped from him, from those sad, dark eyes. I wished he would look at me, let me know that we were in it together. Instead, he breathed deeply and silently, and focused inwardly. Shutting out the world. Telling IT to keep away, rather than the other way around. We had to be careful that we weren’t seen. Because that would be it. And it couldn’t be it, not yet. Because we weren’t ready for it to be. I could feel the danger hanging off my nerve-endings, threatening to snap them. And our footsteps seemed inordinately loud. And I couldn’t stop my stupid body from trembling. But we weren’t going t

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              SimulationofSai
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              Too many short sentences. It feels like driving through a road full of speed bumps. Most of your paragraphs are like that. Make em a little longer.

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                Too many short sentences. It feels like driving through a road full of speed bumps. Most of your paragraphs are like that. Make em a little longer.

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                SimulationofSai wrote:

                Too many short sentences.

                I was trying for a different style to my usual one. Normally I'm rather verbose. :laugh:

                SimulationofSai wrote:

                Most of your paragraphs are like that. Make em a little longer.

                If I'm honest, they look longer on Word. :)

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                  'Overly' is an adverb. ;P

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                  Don't end sentences with Adverbs either! :)

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                    SimulationofSai wrote:

                    Too many short sentences.

                    I was trying for a different style to my usual one. Normally I'm rather verbose. :laugh:

                    SimulationofSai wrote:

                    Most of your paragraphs are like that. Make em a little longer.

                    If I'm honest, they look longer on Word. :)

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                    Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

                    I was trying for a different style to my usual one. Normally I'm rather verbose.

                    Different FROM! Similar TO! Good Grammar helps when reading, B+

                    ------------------------------------ "I'd rather have a bottle in front of me than a frontal lobotomy" - Bob Monkhouse

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                    • S soap brain

                      Does anyone like you?

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                      Lost User
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                      I think the question should be do they like you

                      The Developer - CEH

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                      • S soap brain

                        For English. Basically we had to draw a basic plot out of a hat and write a short story based off it. I drew 'running away from home', and I've written some, but I have no idea where I'm going with it. I need some ideas for an ending, and of course the other bits I've left out. General criticism is certainly welcome too, as long as it's critical praise! :-D Anyway, here it is: **** I felt like I’d made the right choice, even though there was no choice. Not really. All I’d done was all I could do. I’d put some warm clothes on, stuffed my black backpack that was only three weeks old. And that was it. I was gone. Slinking through the darkness, caressed by the breath that crystallised in front of me. Only able to see a distance of mere inches, the air was so bad. I was lost, it seemed. Despite the purpose in my walk, despite the assuredness in my face. I was as transparent as glass, a little kid lost and scared. Maybe my eyes gave it away, the way I always looked away. My lips in a silent prayer to whoever would listen. I told them that I didn’t want to die here tonight. And I kept on telling them. I was on my way to see my friend. He was the loneliest kid I had ever seen, save for me. Lonelier, even, because he was strong and I was weak. I needed him, but he didn’t need me. Still, he agreed to come with me tonight. He knew he had to, too. He was going to our secret place, like I was. And after that, we’d get away. Just like we’d always dreamed. I found him, as I knew I would. Waiting for me. And I felt a tremendous rush of gratitude towards him, for being here. Reminding me that I am not alone. I wanted him to see how happy I was to see him, but his eyes were downcast. Like he didn’t even see me. Like he was vaguely someone else. And he muttered, more to himself than anything, that we should get going right away. And we did. We were quiet, because we had to be, at least at the moment. But, the quietude dripped from him, from those sad, dark eyes. I wished he would look at me, let me know that we were in it together. Instead, he breathed deeply and silently, and focused inwardly. Shutting out the world. Telling IT to keep away, rather than the other way around. We had to be careful that we weren’t seen. Because that would be it. And it couldn’t be it, not yet. Because we weren’t ready for it to be. I could feel the danger hanging off my nerve-endings, threatening to snap them. And our footsteps seemed inordinately loud. And I couldn’t stop my stupid body from trembling. But we weren’t going t

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                        The style reminds me of Sin City (the movie). You need Bruce Willis to read it for you. :)

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                          Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

                          I was trying for a different style to my usual one. Normally I'm rather verbose.

                          Different FROM! Similar TO! Good Grammar helps when reading, B+

                          ------------------------------------ "I'd rather have a bottle in front of me than a frontal lobotomy" - Bob Monkhouse

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                          I beg to differ - as Henry Fowler[^] once said: That different can only be followed by 'from' and not by 'to' is a superstition. So there. ;P ;)

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                            I think the question should be do they like you

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                            soap brain
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                            Just answer the damn question.

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                            • S soap brain

                              Just answer the damn question.

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                              Christian Graus
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                              Just get a room, the pair of you.

                              Christian Graus No longer a Microsoft MVP, but still happy to answer your questions.

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                              • D Dalek Dave

                                Don't end sentences with Adverbs either! :)

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                                ftw melvin
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                                LOL (good recovery DD, I don't think anyone noticed).

                                "If you reward everyone, there will not be enough to go around, so you offer a reward to one in order to encourage everyone." Mei Yaochen in the 'Doing Battle' section of Sun Tzu's: Art of War. .

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                                  Just get a room, the pair of you.

                                  Christian Graus No longer a Microsoft MVP, but still happy to answer your questions.

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                                  soap brain
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                                  That's what I've been trying to do! He's not quite so corruptible, though. ;)

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                                    For English. Basically we had to draw a basic plot out of a hat and write a short story based off it. I drew 'running away from home', and I've written some, but I have no idea where I'm going with it. I need some ideas for an ending, and of course the other bits I've left out. General criticism is certainly welcome too, as long as it's critical praise! :-D Anyway, here it is: **** I felt like I’d made the right choice, even though there was no choice. Not really. All I’d done was all I could do. I’d put some warm clothes on, stuffed my black backpack that was only three weeks old. And that was it. I was gone. Slinking through the darkness, caressed by the breath that crystallised in front of me. Only able to see a distance of mere inches, the air was so bad. I was lost, it seemed. Despite the purpose in my walk, despite the assuredness in my face. I was as transparent as glass, a little kid lost and scared. Maybe my eyes gave it away, the way I always looked away. My lips in a silent prayer to whoever would listen. I told them that I didn’t want to die here tonight. And I kept on telling them. I was on my way to see my friend. He was the loneliest kid I had ever seen, save for me. Lonelier, even, because he was strong and I was weak. I needed him, but he didn’t need me. Still, he agreed to come with me tonight. He knew he had to, too. He was going to our secret place, like I was. And after that, we’d get away. Just like we’d always dreamed. I found him, as I knew I would. Waiting for me. And I felt a tremendous rush of gratitude towards him, for being here. Reminding me that I am not alone. I wanted him to see how happy I was to see him, but his eyes were downcast. Like he didn’t even see me. Like he was vaguely someone else. And he muttered, more to himself than anything, that we should get going right away. And we did. We were quiet, because we had to be, at least at the moment. But, the quietude dripped from him, from those sad, dark eyes. I wished he would look at me, let me know that we were in it together. Instead, he breathed deeply and silently, and focused inwardly. Shutting out the world. Telling IT to keep away, rather than the other way around. We had to be careful that we weren’t seen. Because that would be it. And it couldn’t be it, not yet. Because we weren’t ready for it to be. I could feel the danger hanging off my nerve-endings, threatening to snap them. And our footsteps seemed inordinately loud. And I couldn’t stop my stupid body from trembling. But we weren’t going t

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                                    The structure isn't quite right; you need to have some kind of conflict in the middle - perhaps an argument that causes the two of you to assess what you are doing: eg 1. Argument causes boy to leave you to return home (he can come back if it helps) 2. You come across other runaways whose life style forces you to consider where this will lead eg prostitution 3. You are forcibly parted 4. You reveal a revelation eg pregnancy that turns the story into something different 5. The boy turns into a flesh eating zombie, from Mars Overcoming the conflict will give some purpose to the end of the story. Texts to consider: Waiting for Godot (possibly a bit wordy) Of Mice and Men Watership Down Zombie Flesh Eaters from Mars

                                    "If you reward everyone, there will not be enough to go around, so you offer a reward to one in order to encourage everyone." Mei Yaochen in the 'Doing Battle' section of Sun Tzu's: Art of War. .

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                                      Don't end sentences with Adverbs either! :)

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                                      Did everyone read these brilliant emails from Giles Coren, including where he raged against an unstressed syllable at the end of a paragraph? http://www.guardian.co.uk/media/2008/jul/25/pressandpublishing.thetimes[^]

                                      "If you reward everyone, there will not be enough to go around, so you offer a reward to one in order to encourage everyone." Mei Yaochen in the 'Doing Battle' section of Sun Tzu's: Art of War. .

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                                        wrong place to post:omg: :wtf: :omg: :wtf: :omg: :wtf: :omg: :wtf: :sigh: :omg: :wtf: :sigh: :omg: :wtf: :sigh: :omg: :wtf: :doh: :sigh: :omg: :wtf: :sigh: :omg: :wtf: :omg: :wtf: :omg: :wtf: :omg: :wtf: :omg: :sigh:

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                                        ftw melvin
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                                        Why?

                                        "If you reward everyone, there will not be enough to go around, so you offer a reward to one in order to encourage everyone." Mei Yaochen in the 'Doing Battle' section of Sun Tzu's: Art of War. .

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                                          Ravel H. Joyce wrote:

                                          That wasn't the plan, but it doesn't matter overly.

                                          ? Never end a Sentence with a preposition! Up with this I will not put.

                                          ------------------------------------ "I'd rather have a bottle in front of me than a frontal lobotomy" - Bob Monkhouse

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                                          Dalek Dave wrote:

                                          Up with this I will not put

                                          [low throaty noise] strong with this one the Force is :-D

                                          Beauty is only a light switch away.

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