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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
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and thus will not be affected "thus" is replaceable with "so" so: if you wrote "and will so not be affected" <-- that doesn't sound right does it? ("so wrong" as the kiddies say) ... not saying use "so", just that "thus" is in the wrong place.
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
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I would write
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Players who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the unmodified master playlist and will not be affected.
leaving out "they" and "thus". btw, you have "the the" in your sentence.
I'd agree - "thus" is pretty archaic and not needed in "Normal writing".
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
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I'd agree - "thus" is pretty archaic and not needed in "Normal writing".
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
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I would simplify it further:- "Only users who start streaming inside peak hours will be affected".
Or better: Users streaming during peak hours may receive a modified master playlist. "Brevity is the soul of wit."
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
Leave it, it is fine.
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I would write
Quote:
Players who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the unmodified master playlist and will not be affected.
leaving out "they" and "thus". btw, you have "the the" in your sentence.
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
"the peak hours" is awkward -- normally, the phrase is without "the", as in "during peak hours" "and they will thus not be affected" => remove it entirely. "will get the unmodified master playlist" is sufficient. Or: "will not be affected and will get the unmodified master playlist." "will get the" => "will receive". "Get" is sort of low class and probably lacking descriptiveness. "will get the the unmodified" => I'm assuming the second "the" was a typo? Consider reversing the logic of the sentence: "Users who start streaming during peak hours will receive a modified playlist. Users who start streaming just before peak hours are unaffected."
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"the peak hours" is awkward -- normally, the phrase is without "the", as in "during peak hours" "and they will thus not be affected" => remove it entirely. "will get the unmodified master playlist" is sufficient. Or: "will not be affected and will get the unmodified master playlist." "will get the" => "will receive". "Get" is sort of low class and probably lacking descriptiveness. "will get the the unmodified" => I'm assuming the second "the" was a typo? Consider reversing the logic of the sentence: "Users who start streaming during peak hours will receive a modified playlist. Users who start streaming just before peak hours are unaffected."
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Thanks good answer, and yeah, I do have the "the the" in almost every sentence I write :sigh: is there a diagnosis for that?
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megaadam wrote:
is there a diagnosis for that?
not enough :java::java:
M.D.V. ;) If something has a solution... Why do we have to worry about?. If it has no solution... For what reason do we have to worry about? Help me to understand what I'm saying, and I'll explain it better to you Rating helpful answers is nice, but saying thanks can be even nicer.
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megaadam wrote:
is there a diagnosis for that?
not enough :java::java:
M.D.V. ;) If something has a solution... Why do we have to worry about?. If it has no solution... For what reason do we have to worry about? Help me to understand what I'm saying, and I'll explain it better to you Rating helpful answers is nice, but saying thanks can be even nicer.
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SACRILEGE... there is never too much coffee or bacon :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:
M.D.V. ;) If something has a solution... Why do we have to worry about?. If it has no solution... For what reason do we have to worry about? Help me to understand what I'm saying, and I'll explain it better to you Rating helpful answers is nice, but saying thanks can be even nicer.
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
megaadam wrote:
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
You have two 'the's in that sentence ;)
“That which can be asserted without evidence, can be dismissed without evidence.”
― Christopher Hitchens
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"the peak hours" is awkward -- normally, the phrase is without "the", as in "during peak hours" "and they will thus not be affected" => remove it entirely. "will get the unmodified master playlist" is sufficient. Or: "will not be affected and will get the unmodified master playlist." "will get the" => "will receive". "Get" is sort of low class and probably lacking descriptiveness. "will get the the unmodified" => I'm assuming the second "the" was a typo? Consider reversing the logic of the sentence: "Users who start streaming during peak hours will receive a modified playlist. Users who start streaming just before peak hours are unaffected."
Latest Article - Code Review - What You Can Learn From a Single Line of Code Learning to code with python is like learning to swim with those little arm floaties. It gives you undeserved confidence and will eventually drown you. - DangerBunny Artificial intelligence is the only remedy for natural stupidity. - CDP1802
And while we are at it, we could replasse all the 'will's with 'shall', thus making it clear that there shall be no discussions about this. :-)
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megaadam wrote:
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
You have two 'the's in that sentence ;)
“That which can be asserted without evidence, can be dismissed without evidence.”
― Christopher Hitchens
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:cool:Not exactly homework, more like a fine tuning of the fine English language. Here is a passage of the documentation I am writing.
Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
I find the "they" at the end a bit clunky. But if just write
[...] and will thus not be affected.
I am not sure if the sentence remains correct, and clear. I mean "they" refers to the unaffected users, and in the the second case "will" is referring back to the users. Perhaps both are fine but I wonder. Thanks for any input, and for reading this far.
... such stuff as dreams are made on
Bless you, bless you, bless you for using "affected" instead of the abomination that is "impacted." Wisdom teeth are sometimes "impacted." Otherwise that word should rarely be used
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I'd agree - "thus" is pretty archaic and not needed in "Normal writing".
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For some reason "thus" often works well for me. I like non-standard words, it keeps things interesting. I used "notwithstanding" a couple times in a training manual. Once and a while I like to use the interrobang (Alt+8253) in an e-mail. A great and underused punctuation mark. Not sure how to do it here though.
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For some reason "thus" often works well for me. I like non-standard words, it keeps things interesting. I used "notwithstanding" a couple times in a training manual. Once and a while I like to use the interrobang (Alt+8253) in an e-mail. A great and underused punctuation mark. Not sure how to do it here though.
The trouble with that is that it's demonstrating your education, your intelligence. Like using "diacritic" to describe the accents that appear above or below a character in some languages. It's the right word, but 99% of people have never even heard of it! That's not what a manual or user instruction is about: it's to help the user, not make him feel stupid. Took me a long time to realise that: you write for "average Joe" (or more likely for "less-than-average Joe") so that what you write is as clear as possible to everybody. Save clever language for talking to clever people - who will probably critique your usage, but that's life! :laugh: For example, in the previous sentence I used a dash, which is wrong but understood. It should — of course — be an em dash as in this sentence.
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